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Literacy Key Skills Friday 13th March 2015

Posted by on March 13, 2015

The storm broke early in the evening and by seven o’clock it looked as if Heathrow might have to shut down. Runway One had disappeared in the rain. Runway Two was a canal. Half the planes had been delayed and the other half were circling hopelessly above the clouds, waiting their turn to land. The wind had blown an Air France DC10 all the way to Luton while, in a jumbo jet from Tokyo, seventy-nine Japanese passengers had all been sick at the same time. It was a night no one would forget.

Above is the beginning paragraph to “Granny” by Anthony Horowitz. As we have looked recently at great openings to stories, your task is to take that paragraph and make it even better! We looked at: dramatic short sentences, rhetorical questions, scene setting and generally confusing the reader with cliff-hangers. It will be great for us to then compare how we have all changed the opening in different ways!

I look forward to reading all of them 🙂 

 

12 Responses to Literacy Key Skills Friday 13th March 2015

  1. Celina

    It was a night no one would forget. The thunder storm broke early in the evening and by seven o’clock it looked as if Heathrow might have to close down. Half the planes were delayed half were flying like lunatics above the clouds , waiting to land. Runaway one has vanished in the strong rain.Ranaway two was canal.

  2. Alicia

    Seven o’clock. For the first time, Heathrow Airport was trying to settle a dispute with a savage storm. It was not appearing to be triumphant though – the airport was on the verge of shutting down: Runway One had entombed itself in rainfall. Runway Two was a canal. Delayed, half of the aircrafts’ passengers were waiting helplessly inside the frantic building, whilst the remainder were circling above the clouds, waiting for their turn to land. The wind, raging, had whirled an Air France DC10 directly to Luton. Meanwhile, in a jumbo jet from Tokyo, seventy-nine Japenese travellers had all been sick at the same time. No one would forget the eventful night, that day…

  3. chopper

    It was seven o’clock and for some reason Heathrow airport l fell silent for a while. Run way one became a swimming pool in a split second. Half of the aircrafts were deleted leaving people stranded and some cancelled. Whilst inside the aircraft, passengers wait frantically for their arrival. Meanwhile passengers in the jumbo jet (that came from Japan holding 92 passengers ) were waiting to land in the pouring rain. This would be a night that no one would forget…

  4. Tyla

    The storm broke! It was seven o’clock! It looked as if Heathrow might have to shut down! Runway One had disappeared in the dreadful rain and Runway Two was no better with a shoulder deep canal. Half of the planes had unfortunately been delayed with the other half still silently circling the evil depths of the mixture of the sky and clouds that now looked like a giant ink splat! The powerful wind had blown a colossus Air France DC10 all the way to the tiny town of Luton while, in a jumbo jet that can glide through the air like a paper aeroplane from Tokyo had turned into a giant sick bag and that night was a night that everyone can’t forget!

  5. D.T

    The savage storm broke free from the heavens above at seven o’clock.It looked like heathrow,the airport, had to shut down due to many airplanes delayed. Whilst plains were flying aimlessly Runway one was slowly sinking below zero pleading for assist. Runway two was a tremendous canal the size of 3 great wails. The raging storm launched Air France DC10 on a direct course to Luton. Meanwhile, a jumbo jet from Tokyo, more than a dozen passengers where all sick at the same time due to the turbulence on the plain. No one forgot that day and no body did, it haunted them for the rest of their lives.

  6. Kevin Y6

    No-one would forget that night. The storm was encroaching upon them. By seven o’clock, Heathrow Airport looked like the site of a nuclear wasteland-neglected and forgotten. Runway One was the aftermath of a tsunami. Runway Two was slowly sinking into the abyss. Meanwhile, half of the of the planes were flying cluelessly at the runway,whilst the passengers were frantically scavenging for anything they could cling onto. The callous winds forced an ‘Air France DC10’ towards Luton; twenty-seven passengers were sick and ailing. Unfortunatly for us, we had just arrived…

  7. Rohan

    Seven o’clock. Heathrow’s biggest nightmare had just occurred. It seemed that Heathrow had shut down all the runways due to this hazardous storm. Runway one was shattered in rain. Runway two looked as if a creature rose up from hell and made it look like a wasteland. The storm had evolved into something we could ever imagine. The wind had caused havoc and made an Air France DC10 go directly to Luton. Then 79 passengers were sick at the same time due to the gas which was leaking from the plane. No one had ever forgotten about this horrid day.

  8. Lucy

    An unwanted storm occurred in the evening around seven o clock.Heathrow may have to close down! Disappearing in the rain was railway one. And railway two was a canal! Late and delayed was half of the planes, yet the other half were aimlessly hovering above the foggy clouds waiting to land. Why bother? Meanwhile air France DC10 had been blown by the rapid wind to Luton. Half way across the world Tokyo had seventy nine Japanese passengers together all being sick at more or less the same time. Due to all that, of course, it would be a night not even you would forget. What is the world coming to these days?

    By Lucy

  9. kasey

    Seven o’clock. The uncivilised storm broke out. They fought, storm vs plane. Never had this happened before. Heathrow was down. Runway one had vanished only for it’ system to fall apart. Runway two’s system was broken -considering the runway was now a canal. When would this end? The Air France DC10 was shot down by the ferocious wind. Planes coiled the sky over and over again waiting for their turn to land. That could never happed. Meanwhile, the Jumbo Jet from Tokyo had seventy-nine passengers on board, all being sick at the same time. Don’t you think this is a terrible and horrifying night? Well this was a night not to be forgotten…

  10. tilli

    An unwelcome storm appeared in the evening around seven o clock. It looked as if Heathrow may have to shut down. Runway one had dissolved in the pouring rain. Runway two was a canal. Half of the planes had been delayed whilst the other half were circling tragically above the dim clouds, waiting impatiently for their turn to be freed. The rapid wind has sent an air France DC10 to Luton. Over on the other side of the world Tokyo had seventy-nine passenger together all being sick at the same time. Due to all of this disruption, it was the worst night no one could possibly forget.
    Tilli 🙂

  11. RR

    A nasty storm struck Heathrow airport and everyone thought that it is going to be shut down.Runway 1 has vanished in the unstoppable rain.Runway 2 was miraculously
    evolved to a flooding canale !Most of the planes were delayed because of the incident and the rest were circling the airport finding a way to land safely.An Air France was pushed all the way to Luton by the menacing, ferocious wind as strong as a lion and in a Japanese Jet ,all the passengers were sick at the same time. It was the night that no-one was going to forget.Ever!

  12. Paris

    A storm broke early on a dark evening, a dark Thursday evening. When morning pounced a single rain drop appeared then 3 then 8 until Heathrow airport was flooded with rain. Suddenly nearly everybody were being sick…all at the same time!..
    It was nobody could ever forget !

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